Recent content by Eddric

I'd still say diabetes is a good way to go with what you described. I've been in the medical field for about 10 years at this point, EMT to nurse, so I've seen a lot of the problems that comes from rationing or not taking the prescribed medicine. Especially over here in the US where pharm and...

I guess it also depends on how long and drawn out you want the courtship to be. Do you want it subtle, or quite obvious that one is being courted?

That was beautiful. That's some incredibly creative and thought out stuff. Is there someone in your world that can tell a mage that they are level 14 or 16? Or warn them when they are getting close to the major points and how to keep themselves from being ripped apart? Or do they just have to...

Towards the end there, it mentioned something about reaching level 100. Where did that come from? How does one gain levels and what are the requirements to go from one to the next?

It's definitely poetic. It's good big bang world building stuff. How does it relate to your story, if there is one?

The Marked are people who were captured when they were toddlers by the Fae. During this time, they were replaced with a changeling. If the parents didn't kill the changeling within 7 days (notice that their child was taken), then the changeling would disappear and the child would never be...

Thanks for the response. The Witches in the story aren't actually directly consequential for quite a while when it comes to the actual protagonist, but they are consequential to the story as a whole. There are a lot of layers that I have set out, but as I am very new to this forum, I just wanted...

Thanks all!

What's the stage above a Baba Yaga, and how would it benefit the members to make sure she gets there? Are there classes of gods? Could the Baba Yaga instill a sort of hypnotic allegiance onto her followers?

I have a designed magic system, that I'll post about later, as it is large. The topic here are Witches in my story. Witches are women only (for the sake of this post, just go with that, there is a lot to my world/story). The vast majority of people in this world are born with Witch...

Their magic always seems vague, so I can (potentially) use that to my advantage. Many times they come from a different realm, allowing for secrets to remain secret and I don't really have to put any work into explaining them. They are secretive as a whole and can come and go as I need them too...

There's only so much one can do with brooms or vacuums space-wise. Too much customization might make actual flying difficult. Perhaps different colors, types of wood, material for bristles, spells carved in to produce different effects and such.

Could be something like ingesting the heart of another witch would actually be detrimental instead of helpful. Once there is so much mana within a heart, it becomes toxic. Think of it like eating a banana, great source of potassium, but ingesting pure potassium would be poisonous and cause great...

It kind of reminds me of Brandon Sanderson and his Mistborn. I like it, it's very detailed. My only questions are, what is the mystery? What is the secret that is hidden about the abilities, how can it be exploited or experimented on? What is left to discover about it that the government and/or...

Hey guys! New here. I'm looking forward to talking with others and getting some feedback on my story and world. There's a lot to it, so I'll work on that later, but I'm excited to talk with other like minded people!